In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Nowadays in four corners of
this
tumultuous world, in some of
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apply
countries
people prefer to buy a house or an apartment substitute Add a comma
countries,
to
rentingChange preposition
of
that
. In my solid Correct pronoun usage
apply
opinion
it is a repercussion of the price volatilities meanwhile it is a positive situation.
It is crystal clear that nations want to be comfortable and do not be concerned about Add a comma
opinion,
financial
future but in many countries, they have to fight with hard economic situations. Not only cause Correct pronoun usage
their financial
expenditure’s
increase anxiety but Change noun form
expenditure
also
it is the main reason that
why people buy Correct word choice
apply
home
. Correct your spelling
homes
instead
of renting that. By way of example, in my country
most Add a comma
country,
of
families have their own Change preposition
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home
because they Fix the agreement mistake
homes
scare from
being homeless. One of my friends said, Wrong verb form
are scared of
if
we did not have … Correct word choice
that if
home
, we pay a lot each month for rent.
Having a property for
your own is better absolutely. Indeed, if you buy something, you will be its owner and under no circumstance may you lose that unless sell it. Change preposition
of
In addition
, your family members can inherit that home
or property after your death and they do
not Verb problem
are
force
to make Wrong verb form
forced
effort
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an effort
for having
an appropriate residence so you can kill two birds with one stone Change preposition
to have
by
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apply
this
way. So, from a realistic view
it is a positive situation. Add a comma
view,
For instance
, in my society many youngsters have an inherited home
and they can investigate
their money Verb problem
spend
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in
on
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in
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a
the
lucrative job Correct article usage
a
instead
of Wrong verb form
paying
pay
for Wrong verb form
paying
Correct article usage
a house
house
.
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a house
To sum up
, As discussed in the previous paragraphs, some individuals would rather buy a home
because of the economy’s situations
and it is a beneficial trend in my opinion Fix the agreement mistake
situation
due to
the reasons which I have explained.Submitted by TUTOO on
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