With internet improvement people can & opinions on certain goods or service that they purchased. Is this good or bad thing? . Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

With the
appeareance
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appearance
of the
internet
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people
have an opportunity to share their opinion on purchased goods or
service
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services
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
positive
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and negative sides of it
,
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and will explain why I believe that it is a great
option
.  It is not a secret for anyone that all of us look at the
reviews
on certain goods that we want to purchase, thereby we
are
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always make a decision based on these
reviews
.
However
, sometimes
people
write negative
reviews
without arguments just to reduce the number of sales of
this
product
.
People
's ability to write
the
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reviews
can
also
affect
at
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products' quality. By
this
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I mean that in
this
world full of competition, it is easy to spoil the goods of someone else's service by writing a bad review about it. In my country,
for example
, there was one accident, where
people
wrote a lot of negative
reviews
about
food
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company
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companies
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,
in
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and in
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the
end
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this
company was closed. The internet gave us a great opportunity to share our opinions in relation to purchased items or
service
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services
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. By
this
, we can highlight the advantages and disadvantages of the item,
also
giving some advice to future owners.
Additionally
, we can look at the
reviews
of the buyers, before purchasing the item, thereby
evaluate
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the quality of the
product
, and based on
this
make your choice.
For example
, I always use
this
option
when I want to buy something
,
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because it helps me to make a decision and understand the reason
of
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my interest
to
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this
product
. In conclusion,
this
is a great
option
for
people
in relation to
improvement
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of the
product
and
also
checking the
reviews
of the owners in order to make the best choice, so I strongly believe that
this
option
make
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the
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people
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lives
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much easier.
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