some people think university education should prepare student for employment. Other people think the university has other functions. Discuss both views and what do you think the function of the university.

Education is the most significant for all
the
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human beings and people will adapt more and more education as they are capable
of
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.
Besides
, Some individuals think The
government
should select those
subjects
to
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scholar
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and
applied
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to the university. In spite
of
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,
other
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others
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think that
undergraduate
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be going to be allowed to choose
subjects
which they wanted to learn. I will discuss my potential opinions in the subsequent paragraphs.
First
, in many countries, the
government
and the
schools
selected the
subjects
according to themselves.
For instance
, in India, the
subjects
are chosen by the
schools
and not
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by
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a junior
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junior
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.
Therefore
, these
subjects
will
lacking
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of
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to them, and they couldn’t able to enhance what they wanted and what they are
expert
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in. They don't have either option,
unfortunately
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they have to study these
subjects
. They will demotivate by themselves and it would affect their career.
This
scenario will create intricate
to
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the students.
On the other hand
, in some countries, the junior
attend
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to select the
subjects
And the
government
and the
schools
do not interfere in
this
matter. There are
few
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merits Which
succors
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the pupil that
they
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will select those
subjects
Which they have their expertise and
wanted
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to learn more about to those
subjects
.
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, it
is inevitably gives
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benefits
to
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the pupil and patronizes
in
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their
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future.
By polishing
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their
subjects
in
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the
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young age,
this
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will ameliorates
to
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those
subjects
And ended up being an expert and successful. To sum up, the
government
and
schools
shouldn't select the
subjects
and
it
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shall be selected by the pupil.
Therefore
, those selected
subjects
shall be helpful to them.
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