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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as unsatisfactory job.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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very
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 important part of everyone's life rather it will be done
with
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 bad
situations
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 or
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 circumstances. Some individuals think that it best Try and improve
such
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situations
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,
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however
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 other
school
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 of thought opine that it is better to
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accept
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the
situation
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.
This
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 essay will elucidate both
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notions along wilt my perspective with a logical conclusion in impending fragments. On the one hand,there are umpteen reasons why
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human beings
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their
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work
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 even in bad
situations
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 reason is
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need
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of
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 an hour.To be more precise,if
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a poor
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 person is
darely
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dearly
rarely
direly
 in need of
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job
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a job
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 he or she will be ready to do
work
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 in every
situation
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either
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 it is good or bad.The person's need is to just
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 the demand of their family.
secondly
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, if
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the individual
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 is taking
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hefty amount from his
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 and he is working
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at
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high
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 position ,
then
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also
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 he will not be interested to change the
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situations
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 as he is getting whatever his goals are.
For instance
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,a survey conducted by
jobs
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a jobs
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 care
organization
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 ,in the year 2011,the findings revealed the fact that 60
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 of people are doing their
job
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 without asking any questions and without taking care of bad
situations
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 as they are earning well.
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,there are many people who want to improve the
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situations
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.The predominant reason is,
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work
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 in
peaceful
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 environment. To elaborate
it
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, some
persons
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 love to
work
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 in
an
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 healthy environment so they try to improve the
situation
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 so that they can do
there
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their
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work
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 with more energy and in
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a positive
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 manner.
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 to
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,for the growth of the company.To elaborate
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, individuals who are ambitious and
career oriented
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 will try to improve the problems as if no problem will be there only
then
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 employees can get growth and
high
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 amount of salary which will automatically
results
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growth
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the growth
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 of an
organization
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,
a
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is
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conducted by
profit
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a profit
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 and loss
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organization
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organizations
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in the year 2012, the findings revealed that 80
percent
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 of companies able to reach
at
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the
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heights
who's
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whose
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 employers
are give
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 their best efforts to improve the
situation
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 of a company. To recapitulate,
although
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 it is better to do the
job
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 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the basic needs of
family
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the family
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 ,
butdoing
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but doing
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job
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the job
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 by improving things can be more fruitful

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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