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Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Traditional sites are important, but it sometimes needs to be renewed, so the government should be careful when they want to deal with historical
buildings
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. In my opinion, We can each make a contribution to preserve these sites . It involves people being more responsible for keeping them for several reasons which I will discuss in
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, To have
a modern
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modern buildings
a modern building
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buildings
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, countries have a lot of sites to build them , so there is no excuse for the government to destroy these historic
buildings
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.Keeping
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 old building will attract a lot of tourists from around the world to visit and
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 that will benefit the city and make a lot of income.
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, Media and TV will
also
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 try to do their shows and made films in these old
buildings
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.
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 of
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 shops and markets around will increase their sale.Sure There are many political and economic benefits.
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, Historic
buildings
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 show our identity and our ancestor's life.we should preserve them clearly.
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, some people in a city near my home, have
an old
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an old building
old buildings
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buildings
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 that sine three hundred years
,
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 and they clean them and take care of these
buildings
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 because they claim it shows their culture, so everyone respects them highly. As they said if you want to have a good future, you should take care of your past. To sum up, the government should not remove these historic
buildings
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 and spend financial aid to make them clean and beautiful.
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,They must set a law that prevents destruction in these
buildings
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