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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The working environment is different from one workplace to another. Is working in the same job location preferable more than working in a different place or the opposite is more chosen? I opine that working with the same
organization
 has various advantages in terms of habituated persons and location, and more comfortable for psychological health. Working in the same area has many benefits, first of all, no need to make new friends and recognise other people and take a long time to know their working methods and their thought, another important reason I think it is better for psychological health , as there is no need to keep in stress and bother to show your skills and abilities in providing high-quality performance and products,
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, recently I moved to a new
organization
 for two months I couldn’t sleep because of continuous thinking whom can I deal with new persons and a new manager and how will they know my skills comparing with old colleges. On
other
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 hand, we can’t ignore the bones of working in another workplace
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 gives opportunities for individuals to learn new things and skills but
also
 creates a chance to get a better promotion or even higher salary,
nevertheless
 the possibility to get a better job position as well .
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 situation happened with my friend who has spent 7 years of her life in the same
organization
 without any promotion or increases the salary which reflected in her quality
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To sum up
, life is shorter than bothering
on changing
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 our habituated things and people from one workplace to another, so staying with the same
organization
 is considered preferable and has more advantages from the health side.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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