Some school leavers choose to travel or work for a year before going to university. What might be the reasons for this? What are the disadvantages of this practice
School
is a long journey that the local community individual’s
should go through Change the noun form
individuals
individual
since
childhood Change preposition
from
and
toward Correct word choice
apply
adolescent
. In Replace the word
adolescence
this
essay
I’m going to answer two questions, Add a comma
,essay
first
what makes school
leavers avoid studying in the first
year
after graduation from school
and what is
the drawbacks of Change the verb form
are
this
action.
Change the punctuation
?
Although
school
is necessary for kids and they should move through it because it teaches them a lot of things socially and academically, it also
gives them feeling
of safeness and Correct article usage
a feeling
clear
plan, so at the Add an article
a clear
school
period
they are just focusing on their study Add a comma
,period
year
and not what should be done after that in order to build their future. Once school
is finished students got shocked that they should start to provide money
for themselves and no one will does
that for them. Change the verb form
do
Therefore
some of them thinks
that he has to work to gain enough Change the verb form
think
money
so it
allows Correct pronoun usage
apply
him
to join Correct pronoun usage
them
university
. On the other
hand
some already have enough Add a comma
,hand
money
from their parents so they decide to travel for a year
to new
country Add an article
a new
the new
in
where they can learn Change preposition
apply
new
language or find Add an article
a new
better
job which Add an article
a better
provide
enough Change the verb form
provides
money
to study a
degree.
The Change preposition
for a
disadvantages
of delaying Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
university
application for one year
is depending on the person’s motivation, passion and desire to learn. However
, this
practice can affect the person’s well to learn, it may felt
difficult to study after one Wrong verb form
feel
year
of rest from studying. Moreover
, working allow you to get money
whereas in studying you have to pay. In my opinion this
issue sufficient
to make the students lazy and Add a missing verb
is sufficient
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
cause
them to avoid their Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
continue
education.
To conclude, Taking a rest from Replace the word
continued
university
for a year
for traveling or working
can be necessary for some people to join Replace the word
work
university
but Correct article usage
a university
this
action have
drawbacks which might affect the Change the verb form
has
students
desire to learn.Change noun form
student's
students'
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