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Some school leavers choose to travel or work for a year before going to university. What might be the reasons for this? What are the disadvantages of this practice

#school #leavers #travel #work #year #university #practice
School
 is a long journey that the local community
individual’s
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individuals
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 should go through
since
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from
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 childhood
and
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toward
adolescent
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. In
this
essay
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 I’m going to answer two questions,
first
 what makes
school
 leavers avoid studying in the
first
year
 after graduation from
school
 and what
is
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 the drawbacks of
this
 action
.
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Although
school
 is necessary for kids and they should move through it because it teaches them a lot of things socially and academically, it
also
 gives them
feeling
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 of safeness and
clear
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a clear
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 plan, so at the
school
period
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 they are just focusing on their study
year
 and not what should be done after that in order to build their future. Once
school
 is finished students got shocked that they should start to provide
money
 for themselves and no one will
does
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 that for them.
Therefore
 some of them
thinks
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that he has to work to gain enough
money
 so
it
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allows
him
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them
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 to join
university
.
On the other
hand
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 some already have enough
money
 from their parents so they decide to travel for a
year
 to
new
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a new
the new
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 country
in
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apply
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where they can learn
new
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a new
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 language or find
better
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a better
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 job which
provide
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provides
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 enough
money
 to study
a
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for a
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degree. The
disadvantages
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 of delaying
university
 application for one
year
 is depending on the person’s motivation, passion and desire to learn.
However
,
this
 practice can affect the person’s well to learn, it may
felt
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 difficult to study after one
year
 of rest from studying.
Moreover
, working allow you to get
money
 whereas in studying you have to pay. In my opinion
this
 issue
sufficient
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 to make the students lazy and
which
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cause
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causes
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 them to avoid their
continue
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continued
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 education. To conclude, Taking a rest from
university
 for a
year
 for traveling or
working
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work
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 can be necessary for some people to join
university
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a university
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 but
this
 action
have
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has
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 drawbacks which might affect the
students
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student's
students'
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 desire to learn.
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