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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Education
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 is an industry that has seen significant change over the years. Aside from the
curriculum
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 the medium of
education
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 has become diverse with the advancement in technology.
Students
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 no longer have to study at universities but can opt for online
courses
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. There are both pros and cons
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 preferring online
courses
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 over attending lectures. One might argue that online
courses
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 will save commuting
time
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 especially if they live at a distance from universities. In
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 cases
instead
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 of investing say, 3 hours on travel, a student will likely prefer to take online
courses
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. They can spend the
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 saved on assignments
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. Some online
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 are
self paced
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 or pre-recorded and
students
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 can choose to attend the
courses
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 at any
time
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 during the day.
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 flexible arrangements can motivate more people to take up
university
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a university
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degree
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 while
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 having a
part
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part-time
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time
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 job. Attending universities have
their
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its
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 share of benefits. They provide a more conducive learning environment and opportunities for interaction with lecturers.
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addition
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 it promotes peer learning , by creating a healthy learning space for the
students
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 to learn from one another.
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 method is can be ideal for
students
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 who lack
self motivation
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 as
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 forces a routine. I believe that
long distance
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education
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 is preferred for
students
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 who do not have a university in their near vicinity but would still like to educate themselves.
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, if there is a chance to attend a university it is the preferred method of
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 as it promotes an organic learning methodology.
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