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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? there is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and example to support your position.

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I m totally agree with the statement because I strongly believe that it is true that the population of young individuals teach their elder and mature pupils because
in
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 ancient period, countries don't have
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 resources to teach their residents. In
this
, essay we will
further
 elaborate on the positive effects of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
 argument but the most preponderant fact is that
majority
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 of elders are living life in poverty and education and skills are crucial for
society
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societies
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such
 as Pakistan and,
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. Another pivotal aspect is that elder individuals are
backbone
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 of the society and if they acquire knowledge,
consquently
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consequently
, they
also
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in
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the nation
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nation
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 wealth and support in
devlopment
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development
. One sure example is that the article published in
the
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 eminent newspaper
reavlead
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revealed
 that
grandfather
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grandfathers
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 learn physics to their grandchildren because
that
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 time they have no money to learn.
However
, their grandchildren with the help of YouTube teach physics to them in America. Probing ahead, one of the main underlying reasons stems is that education is a treasure and if some younger than us providing to get
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 hesitation.
Besides
, the population learn
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 and new life lessons to
old
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the old
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 generation.
Moreover
, it is pertinent to mention that a survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford in London revealed that poor nations
such
 as India and China grant permission to
youth
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the youth
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 generation that they educate their old pupils because literacy rates in villages
is
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 minute. According to the argument aforementioned above, one can the conclusion, that every individual has the right to learn education and youths play a significant role in
this
 progress and the perks of
this
 notion are instrumental indeed.
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