Many children today are exposed to violent video games and TV programmes. How harmful is this? What can be done to fight this problem?

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. In my, opinion we have numerous methods and techniques to tackle
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but the most preponderant one is that the government should
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this kinds
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of games, videos, and, programmes. One sure example is that parents use precious feature child lock in
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mobile phones. Another striking method is that
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games
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as cricket, basketball, and, football plays a vital role because when
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these sports so they have no time for these hazardous activities.
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, a survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford revealed that numerous skills
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as playing guitar, swimming, and, mount climbing can reduce the potential influence of
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materials
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available on these apps. Moving
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, it is pertinent to mention that the article published in the eminent newspaper depicts that the higher authorities of America start new classes and groups to tackle
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. To sum up, according to the argument aforementioned above, we can find
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issue and the potential influence of
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notion should be decreased by leaps and bounds.
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