City planners tend to arrange schools ,homes , shops and other office in specific areas and separate them from each others .do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages

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planing
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planning
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the cities, homes,
shopes
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shoppes
shops
,
schools
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and schools
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in different
places
, I believe
this
trend has
coused
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caused
cities
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city
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trafic
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traffic
congestion and eventually it can be created mono
culure
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culture
.
One
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the one hand, a separating design of amenities brings some
beneficial
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for
community
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the community
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,
First
and foremost, it creates
favourable
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a favourable
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atmosphere for the users.
For example
, the area with only schools can be created
educational
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an educational
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environmet
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environment
environments
for students and teachers ,
and
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apply
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which means they can carry out their studies without
distracation
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distraction
distractions
, the same thing happens in other
places
.
Furthermore
, people's
safty
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safety
can easily
ensured
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because it is obviously notified when an unauthorized person enters.  On the
oher
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other
hand,
seperated
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separated
separate
schools,shops and others may
caused
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cause
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city traffic congestion ,
In other words
,If the facilities are located in different areas, people have to commute a long way through the city
center
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, which can be
coused
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caused
more cars
on
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in
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the roads in rush hours.
In addition
, separated facilities can
be
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lead to
mono culture
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monoculture
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. when
the
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society
comprise
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with
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of
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distinct
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a distinct
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group
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groups
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of people it tends to
multicultural
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a multicultural
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society.
beside
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, time can be wasted due to
distance
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the distance
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between the
places
;
for example
, if students need to buy stationery or clothing, they must travel far from their school;
this
wasted time could have to
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be
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used to complete some studies. In
conclution
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conclusion
, the
amenties
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amenities
in
seperated
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separated
separate
places
create
user friendly
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user-friendly
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environment ,
however
,
this
trend is caused heavy traffic in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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and
lead
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to
mono culture
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monoculture
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,
therefore
I believe
this
advantages
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does
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not outweigh the disadvantages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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