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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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Ownership of automobiles has drastically increased over the
last
 few decades that even a low-earner can afford to buy it and drive it on Indian roads.
Although
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 automobiles have become a necessity these days,
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 major negative impact on rising
traffic
 congestion cannot be overlooked. In the upcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss the downfalls of the same and provide possible solutions that the government should take to minimise its usage. To commence with,
rising
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 number of
cars
 on road leads not only to
traffic
 jams
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 but is
also
 the central problem behind increasing road accidents. One cannot neglect the fact that
such
traffic
 congestion consumes a lot of time of
people
 sitting in the car, which directly makes them feel exhausted and tired. Getting stuck in
traffic
 has proven to be a major reason for
people
 reaching late at their workplaces and being not able to focus properly on their work. To
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, according to a survey conducted recently by a news channel, The News, 70% of the employees working in MNCs arrive late at their jobs and lack focus and are often found disturbed due to higher congestion on roads. Surging pollution due to
such
traffic
 jams is
also
 the biggest concern for society today. Government plays an important role in discouraging
people
 from buying
cars
. Imposing heavy taxes on
cars
 and
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 in petrol prices can make
people
 step back from purchasing new
cars
. Campaigns and advertisements regarding carpooling and using public transport for travelling to and from workplaces should be encouraged so that not only jams are reduced but
also
 the environment will be improved. It will act like killing two birds with one stone.
Last
 but not the least,
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 transportation system shall be improved by making it 24/7 available and affordable for all the residents of the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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