Your friend wants to send her/his child to learn music. He/she asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to. Write him/her a letter. You should: - Describe the music school - Suggest a teacher or a class to go to - Explain why you recommend it.

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Dear Elen, I think it's a great idea, that you want to

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your son Mark

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music

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school. Let me describe the experience I had in a

music

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academy and give you a few suggestions. As you know, I

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studied

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academy in Amsterdam. It is a well-known institution, that has programmes with a variety of

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music

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instruments.

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, they regularly organise guest courses with the best names in the industry. While it has been ten years since

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graduated, I heard that Mr Smith is still the head of the Piano department. I have

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his classes, and I highly recommend his course. Not only he has a proven track

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records

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as a pianist

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a great teacher. I wish your son all the best in his studies. Let me know how he is progressing. Best regards, V

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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147 words

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Your friend wants to send her/his child to learn music. He/she asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to. Write him/her a letter. You should: - Describe the music school - Suggest a teacher or a class to go to - Explain why you recommend it.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

At the present, the population some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do advantages of this situation outweigh the diadvantages?

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some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. to what extant do you agree or disagree

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Improvement in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping poorer nations in these areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?