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:Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time managment. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #period #study #fun #time #managment
It seems that nowadays,
student
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students
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 prefer to have the freedom to make their own schedule when they want to go to
school
 and have other activities outside of
school
. My opinion is that I disagree that
student
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 get all the freedom to do what they want to do and when they want to do it.
Students
 need to learn what
time
 management is but they can learn that at
school
.
Firstly
,
students
 need to learn at
school
 what
time
 management is. By making assignments and finishing
this
 on
time
. Most
students
 have a hard
time
 doing it and the
school
 is the place to learn from their mistakes. For ,example by working on projects
students
 learn to have more responsibility by finishing projects on
time
.
Secondly
,
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the school
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school
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schools
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 can not work around a
students
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 schedule. If the
student
 decides to go away for half a year
for example
 on vacation is it not on the
school
 to take care of the
student
 to finish the course
.
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 If the
school
 decide to change the course
then
 is on the
student
 to follow that program with the change that it takes longer
then
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than
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 expected. In my ,opinion
students
 do not need all the freedom to choose what and when they want to do it.
This
 is a process that takes
time
 and the
school
 is the place for them to learn it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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