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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton

#maps #show #area #town #norbiton
The maps
informs
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 an industrial area in the town of
norbiton
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Norbiton
Norton
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 and planned the future
contructions
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constructions
construction
 of the place. there is a significant
changed
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 from factories to housing and infrastructures.
Firstly
, there are houses that
built
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are built
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 and put across the river and there is
new
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a new
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 way to pass the river so the farmland
are
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is
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 relocated to the
west
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 area. and because the infrastructure like roads putting more, there will be more places to visit
such
 as the playground, shopping centre, school, and
the
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most important
is
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a medical centre.
Moreover
, the road that only
contain
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contains
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 one ring road will become two ring roads. The
aims
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aim
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 is to connect one place to another.
Building
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A building
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 like
school
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schools
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 and
playground
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playgrounds
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 and other public
place
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places
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 are new and placed around the
the
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apply
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housing.
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