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Some people think that online classes are the best while other thing regular classes do you agree or disagree?

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Since the pandemic started, schools and universities have resorted to online
classes
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 to keep
people
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 safe from the disease. Because of the shift,
people
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 have been arguing
which
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 kind of
classes
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 is better, online or regular. After experiencing both
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 of
classes
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, I have to agree that regular
classes
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is
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 better.
This
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 essay will explain the reason why.
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,
online
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an online
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class
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 is more convenient than
the
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offline
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 ones. That's because we don't need to prepare and travel to the classroom so we can save
time
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 and money. Not to mention, you can
also
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 take notes easier by recording the screen to watch it later anytime you want.
This
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 is why
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online
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an online
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class
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 is better for
people
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 who lives far away
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 for those who work while studying.
On the other hand
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,
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offline
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the offline
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class
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classes
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 will require more
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 and money to spend. Regardless, spending more
time
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 in the
class
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 will make it easier to bond with other
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students
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 and
teacher
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teachers
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. The
class
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 is
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 designed for studying,
therefore
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, it's easier to focus as opposed to
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 through
online
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an online
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class
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classes
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 at home or a cafe. At the present
time
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, I have experienced both online and
offline
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classes
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. The online
class
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 is better for busy
people
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 that want to focus solely on getting information and finishing
task
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tasks
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 to get good grades. Whereas the
offline
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class
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 is better for most
student
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students
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 because they can get more
friend
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friends
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, get to know their teacher, and develop soft skills. Overall, I agree that regular
class
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 is better than online
class
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.
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