Getting promotions are one of the biggest motivators for hard work in the modern workplace. Why are people so driven to receive promotions? What other factors motivate people to work hard?

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promotion
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of hard
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award
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motivation
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can motivate their
employee
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more responsibility
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their
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, they have their own goals and often
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to obtain those
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dreams
such
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having better
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employement
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employment
with
high
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salary. Due to that fact, people
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hard to gain
promortions
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promotions
promotion
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in the same position. Some of
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will provide
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package for the
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person
who are got
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promotion
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encourage
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more
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For instance
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company
I saw my
company
provide
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promotions
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for
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are
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work
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hard
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that property and I was motivated by
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the company
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company
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benefit
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captain in the same property. Due to that fact, provide awards to the
employee
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motivation
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Secondly
.
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could provide salary
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for
staff
motivation
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provide promotion would not encourage
staff
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often
because it
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to conflict with
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each other
due to wrong decision. Because
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salary
increment
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source for the
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staff
motivation
and people give more workforce to the
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company
increase their profits.
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example,
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the
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Sri Lankan
company
end of the year they
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a bonus
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bonus
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to their
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due to
the
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staff
achievement. Due to that fact,
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the employer
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employer
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often received
high profit
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margine
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margin
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conclusion
. the
staff
who was promoted as a
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recognise
of his hard
work
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eccential
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essential
to their
motivation
and
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increase
sally or sharing bonus
also
good
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a good
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measurment
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measurement
tool for
staff
motivation
.
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