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:Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time managment. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #period #study #fun #time #managment
Almost
childrens
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children
 prefer to choose
the
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their
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studies
as
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, and in their free
time
 having
to
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fun that manage the
time
 in
this
firstly
,
Studends
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Students
 Focus and deep work
to
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on
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 proper
studies
,
Secondly
, they are in
his
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their
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 leisure
time
 fun, like
play
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playing
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 cricket
games
 etc. In
this
essay
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 we discussed all the points
how
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on how
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 to manage
time
 during the
studies
.
To begin
 with,Mostly of
childrens
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children
children's
study
proper
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properly
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 hard during
the
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apply
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school
time
 As
,
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apply
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 focus
in
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on
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 their
study
time
 and not multitasking
in
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during
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his
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their
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studies
time
.
For example
, in India students create deep work
and
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apply
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whenever, during the
study
 not going to another work. And in our
study
time
 reading new books, etc not using the mobile, We know all the things, I m prefer and agree with
this
 point to all the
children's
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children
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 not another's multitasking when in the
study
 room.
Moreover
, some
children's
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children
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 are playing
games
 in
his
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their
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 leisure
time
 like cricket volleyball
and
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apply
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etc
another
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another game
other games
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games
,
this
 is very important and helpful to
children
 they are
good
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a good
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 feeling when play
games
for example
,
in
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most
of
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apply
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the studies
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studies
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,studies
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 have found fun is very good
to
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for
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children
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children's
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 health in their
study
time
. As
,
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apply
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 people prefer to when
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to study
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study
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studying
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regular
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regularly
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 they have a certain break and in
this
time
, and using mobile and going to fresh air. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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i
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I
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 prefer
to
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apply
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all the students when are studying only focus
in
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on
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 studying and,
take
Wrong verb form
taking
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 a break is very necessary during
the
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apply
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study
time
.
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