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The key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an inevitable truth that
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environmental issues
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 become a controversial talk of
contemporary
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 era. Since today has constructed diverse industrial companies and
also
 lifestyles, conditions cities, transportation... has changed,
consequently
 some believe that the key solution for
this
 problem is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future people. The main agenda of the impending composition is to elaborate my certitude with befitting examples. Beginning with my rationalisation, there are multifarious points to stand with disagreement. The prominent one is government. What it means is they must control their consumption by ordering all of the departments or even forcing
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them.
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 they can reward
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organisations,
people
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 by several various
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such
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discount
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 for payments or raising
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worker
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... .
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solution
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 to exemplify some civilized countries,
governments
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 can encourage or support scientists to manufacture machines,
new
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 technologies
for
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save
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 energy and
environment
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the environment
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. Exploring ahead the topic, one more worth noticing crux is cultural activities. To explicate
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governments can increase the
cultural
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 of being environmentally friendly,
for
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 make tv programs,
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 local groups as well as
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 subjects relevant to the environment in schools... .
In addition
 one
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 most significant problems in every
countries
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 is air pollution , for
this
 purpose government must increase public transportation by reducing fare , improving quantity bus, subway... . In
conclusion
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 based on
above
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 discussion, it is lucid that
less
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 comfortable life isn't efficient, both governments and people must collaborate, generally control consumption by scientific methods and
moreover
 develop
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cultural
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culture
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 of being environmentally friendly.
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