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Some people think language class should be taught in small class, others think the number of students doesn't matter. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #language #class #students #doesn #matter
Few individuals believe that
language
 classes should be
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 in minute rooms because it is
unimportant
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an unimportant
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 skill. But others reject
this
 notion and claim that
number
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 of learners doesn't matter. In my, opinion
i
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 m totally disagree with
this
 concept. In
this
, essay we will
further
 elaborate on the negative effects of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
 argument but the most preponderant fact is that
students
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the students
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 number doesn't matter because more students
means
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mean
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 more
devlopment
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development
 of
language
, one sure example is that it
is
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also
 help in
learn
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learning
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new
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 culture, and, traditions. Another pivotal aspect is that
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language
 plays a vital role in
tourism
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 sector and it
is
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also
genrate
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generates
 jobs and employment. Moving
further
, it is pertinent to mention that the article published in the eminent newspaper depicts that in India, individuals make profits because of new languages
such
french
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, and, Chinese. Pupils are fascinated by the new languages and institutions
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huge
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amount
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. Probing ahead, one of the main underlying reasons stems is that
internet
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the internet
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 can solve
this
 dilemma of
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a number
the number
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 of learners because they bestow education at home without
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a class
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class room
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classroom
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.
Besides
, more students
also
 lead to profits due to
teacher
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teachers
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take
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 high charges. It is
also
 very important for
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globalization
globalisation
globlzation
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globalisation
 and
the
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language
 is crucial and important According to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach the conclusion that the perks of
language
 classes are instrumental indeed.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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