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Many cities repalce farmlands and parks with houses .Is it positive or negative?

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Farming
areas
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 and public free spaces are replaced by residences, which can cause devastating public health and social problems. On the one hand, agricultural land depletion can have a negative impact on a country's economy and
food
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 security.
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 of unplanned population growth, particularly in metropolises, cropland is being drastically reduced in order to build houses.
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, the country's
food
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 production has decreased and now mostly depends on imported
food
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.
Food
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 safety is ensured when a country produces enough
food
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 for its
people
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.
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, a few years ago, large
areas
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 of coconut lands were cleared by land sale companies, resulting in a lack of coconut products because, while demand for coconuts increased, supply decreased due to lower productivity, and raw coconuts were eventually imported, severely affecting the county's economy.
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, the
residence's
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 physical and mental health can be affected by reducing the park
areas
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, which are used by
residences
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  for outdoor activities
such
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 as physical exercise , sports, and family and friend gatherings that contribute to
people
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's physical and mental stamina.
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, students who live far away from their homes and family members can meet
people
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 in the city park, which will help them avoid loneliness; at the same time,
people
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 come to the park on a daily basis to exercise and relax rather than going to expensive sports
centers
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.
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, parks in the city provide green space and a balanced ecosystem. Plants absorb carbon dioxide, the primary cause of global climate change, and release oxygen, as well as
providing
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 habitat for animals
such
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 as birds.Biosyesmen may be harmed due to the reduction of free spaces.
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, plants serve as natural barriers
for
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to
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 noise, which is one of the main problems in cities. In conclusion, reducing farming and public
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 can lead to severe social and health issues, and
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, the city's
eco system
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ecosystem
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 may be depleted.

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