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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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The 21 century provides
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a lot of technological features.
However
, it's widespread that more and more young people are addicted to their gadgets. Nowadays using a smartphone became
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one of the main parts of daily life. The development of digital technology and artificial intelligence created the computer,
further
 the mobile and now the smartphone. Now there is no
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necessity to entertain yourself in the real life with
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paper books, cinema or meeting with friends outside. All that people want to do, they can find easily on the Internet.
Consequently
, Google and Facebook realised the power of social media and how it works with human psychology creating
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data science, and new algorithms which
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 people spend a lot of time on
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social network. From
childhood
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 a person gets used to gadgets. In my opinion,
this
 fact leads to negative consequences. The children develop slightly, socialization becomes harder.
Moreover
, the result of overusing smartphones is a lack of physical
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. A sedentary lifestyle exacerbates the health problem at
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adult age. To summarise, it seems reasonable to spend less time on the Internet in order to avoid problems in the future by controlling children's screen time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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