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In the future, robots will do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#future #robots #jobs #humans #development
Today, we can see the
rrogress
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progress
 of creating artificial intelligence machines. There are no
doubts
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 that in a few decades,
robots
 will carry out
the
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most
jobs
people
 are doing now.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of robotization. There are many scholars and engineers who are working for creating different types of robotics systems, which are being created in order to help
people
, especially those who have dangerous
jobs
.
Robots
 will be able to replace them, working with chemicals, any kind of
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poison or in an environment with high temperatures, even radiation.
Such
 a replacement will reduce the percentage of
humans'
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 work injuries.
Moreover
,
robots
 are perfect labour to work
at
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 a variety of manufacturing, doing repetitive or difficult kinds of
jobs
such
 as mining or picking up and carrying weight. Robotization would be
also
 helpful to work on production lines where humans get bored, doing the same algorithms of actions from today to today. Having so many upsides, there are
also
 some downsides. Not to mention, there are a great number of those
jobs
people
 can lose robotization. Even the most dangerous ones ensure that
people
 are able to feed themselves and their families. Replacing workplaces as we know
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 now with
robots
 will lead to massive unemployment.
Although
 a robotics implementation, humankind will have to acquire new skills or qualifications in order to adapt to the new reality. In conclusion,
robots
 have
been
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started to be produced and, surely, in a few decades, they will be doing a variety of
jobs
 that
people
 are still doing now. In my perspective,
advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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 as
people
 will not need to do dangerous kinds of
jobs
, providing them
to
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robots
.
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