Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How we can encourage these people to live a health life.

Citizens consuming unhealthy foods and
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not workout regularly are issues that many
people
are
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in
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a
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present day. I will discuss why
this
is the case and will suggest some practical solutions. One of the major issues is that there are a number of
restaurants
that provide delicious tastes,
however
, unhealthy for life. For
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, fast food, BBQ and Shabu ; MC Donalds, KFC, Burger King, and Momo. I had a burger at Burger King with my
colleages
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colleagues
for lunch yesterday because the restaurant is easy to find and the foods are delicious and easy to grab. In order to tackle
this
problem, the government should do something to ensure the healthy lifestyle of
population
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.
First
of all, most of these
restaurants
are imported from other countries.
For instance
, The United States of America, The United
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Kingdom
and Japan.
Therefore
, the state should increase taxes on imported
restaurants
. Another concern is
people
do not work out regularly.
This
is because they have a lot of work and could not allocate their time to exercise. They may earn little money from their jobs.
As a result
, they have to do many works to live their life.
For instance
, Thailand is known as a low-cost-of-living country for foreigners,
however
, when compared to Thai citizens, our standard income could not effort a basic lifestyle. Having a meal
on
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shopping malls is
such
a special event. The effective solution is for government to boost
people
's standard income. Once,
our
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finanically
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financially
stable, we could have time to do many things like
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a workout
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workout
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work out
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. In conclusion,
this
essay examines two reasons why
people
eat unhealthy food and do not work out regularly; there are a number of unhealthy
restaurants
and
people
could not allocate their time
on
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exercise due to
hard working
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hard-working
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lifestyle. To tackle the
first
, the solution is for the authority to rise the taxes on imported
restaurants
. To address the latter, it is advised that
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the governemnt
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governemnt
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government
should increase
people
's standard income.
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