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the best way to reduce crime amongst young people is to teach parents good parenting skill. Do you agree or disargee ?

#crime #people #parents #skill #disargee
The best way
decrease
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a
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 rate of
the
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crime among
children
 is about teaching their
parents
for
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good parenting skills. I
am disagree
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 with
this
 idea of statement. On the one hand, teaching
parents
 it's effective because
in
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 most occasions it depends on
themselves
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them
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.
For
example
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 everybody has two
way
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 in
the
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life, in most
occasions
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 some of the friends teach about crime
however
parents
trying
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 make them better.
Also
parents
unable
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 to change their life because everyone
do
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does
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 what they want to do.
On the other hand
,
teach
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parents
at
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good parenting skills
is
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can help a little bit.
For
example
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 if the
parents
 are smart they can control their
children
 without some problems.
Also
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 it has big benefits if
parents
managed
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 teach their
children
 to better
for
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themselves in their old ages because their
life
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depend
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of
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 the future of their
children
. In conclusion, the best way to decrease
rate
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the rate
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 of the crime is about
allow
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to allow
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 them to be free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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