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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#believe #language #communication #outweigh
With already thousands of
language
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 existing, some people suggest, a new
language
 should be developed to be used solely
for
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 an international platform for
the
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ease of communication.
However
, what here is not considered by
this
 group of people is the issues that might arise with the creation of
this
language
, leading it to be more disadvantageous than
being
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helpful in
anyway
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. In the ensuing paragraphs, I shall discuss the drawbacks of the same.
To begin
 with, there already exist more than a thousand
mother-tongues
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 being spoken and used around the world, deducting the multiple dialects of the same.
Nevertheless
, inventing a new tool for communication sure seems to be temping in a time like
this
, where
the
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speech is used solely for international platforms.
For example
, with the creation of a new tongue students from non-native English countries would not have to spend months
on
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preparing for the IELTS or the TOEFL exams,
instead
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 they could just be learning the new script which is
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 to be used to teach the non-native speakers.
This
 can make education overseas even more accessible to students struggling with learning English. Whereas,
on the contrary
, of
this
 advantage, there are multiple drawbacks
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 coming up with a whole new script and method of communication.
Firstly
, a
language
 or a dialect is the reflection of
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 culture and stories of fo their ancestors going centuries back. Developing a new form of scripture would need a lot of cultural backup from different societies around the globe,
this
 could lead to a mess turning into a
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feud
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 between counties regarding
what
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 nation
having
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 a rich and strong heritage, which could turn out to be disastrous rather than being helpful in any form.
Moreover
, it would create confusion among the people learning the script, leaving them with even more difficulties and challenges in explaining or understanding where a word or its form
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 from. In conclusion, as
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 and convenient as it seems to develop a whole new tongue,
this
 task comes with a set of challenges of
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 own and
hence
 its disadvantages would most definitely outweigh the possible advantages.
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