Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been argued by few that popular personalities can make it easy to decrease the major problems by attracting the attention of international
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organisations.
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, others opined that famous people cannot make
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happen.
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essay will discuss both viewpoints, and I will state my opinion with a reasonable conclusion.
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well known
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people have high standards and approaches and they
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appreciation for others in our society.
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, they attract our youth in many ways and the young population do the same as they do.
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, a famous man Amitab
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Bachman
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social problems like poverty, lack of education and hospitality in society, it will surely decrease these problems one day.
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, some folks have opposite viewpoints. They opined that these personalities just work for their benefit
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for the local population.
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, some famous individuals don't like to converse with
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organisations which can worsen the problem.
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, in many films, celebrities imposed negative views on those
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they don't sport each other in
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. So, how can the government listen to them
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In conclusion, according to me,
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the prominent stars help in some ways to draw the attention of
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agencies,
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also
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makes it hard in many ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid organizations
  • draw attention to
  • important problems
  • celebrities
  • make the problems seem less important
  • influence
  • raise funds
  • public awareness
  • engagement
  • inspire
  • helping those in need
  • distract from
  • real issues
  • deep understanding
  • advocate for
  • overshadow
  • work of aid organizations
  • shallow
  • superficial understanding
  • sensationalize
  • own gain
  • genuinely beneficial
  • caution must be exercised
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