Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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social connection. I strongly disagree with the given topic due to the fact that
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we can make better our linked communication. If I lived in
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negative results. Many support the view that they said that "their
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the whole nine yards that have been stated so far up to dated communication machinery promoting our connections the particular reason for circumstance face-to-face strengthens relationships in spite of the fact that internet correlation more and more sustains alliance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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