You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

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Dear: Sir I

work

in a company.

This

company's

work

very

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difficult

for example

my lessons will finish at 4 o'

clock

and my

work

will start at 5 o'

clock

and will finish at 10 o'

clock

but at

this

time you close the doors. Even some of the time I had to spend the night on the street The problem is that you close the doors at 9 o'

clock

and my

work

ends at 10 o'

clock

. I want to move to another

room

because in our

room

guys are not humane Could you please not close the doors until 10 o'

clock

before my

work

is over as well as I want to transfer

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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to another

room

or change the guys in our

room

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

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132 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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