Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the children of having a large number of toys?

Unquestionably, every
parents
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love their
children
and there
is
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no
parents
were not love their
children
. One of them buys
a
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apply
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toys
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toy
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. Another
believe
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is that
the
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parent
should not
bought
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buy
be bought
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a
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toys
a toy
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toys
to
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for
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their
children
.
This
essay will
be describe
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the advantages and disadvantages and will be discussed them in a sensible conclusion. On the one hand, in childhood, buying
toys
to
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for
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their
children
are
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is
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good so that it will be a motivation for their
children
. there are advantages
such
as
children
become obey to their
parents
and
grow
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children
's creativity and imagination. In
this
circumstance, it is important to make
children
always be happy in their childhood.
For instance
,
parents
gave
a
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toys
a toy
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toys
because
they
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their
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children
has
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have
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won
mathematics
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a mathematics
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competition.
As a result
,
parents
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their parents
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her parents
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gave a reward
for
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children
, it will be an encouragement in
his
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their
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studies.
On the other hand
, some of the
drawbaacks
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drawbacks
make it problematic. Giving
toys
to
children
can cause spoiled. Generally speaking, it is bad if
parents
give a toy respectively. In other
word
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,
children
will become lazy and
do
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not have spirit because
children
think whatever will be given by
parents
easyly
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easily
. Interestingly,
Parents
have
this
trait, they really love their
children
.
For instance
,
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the parent
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parent
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parents
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will not allow feeling sad for their
children
because they have felt it.
As a result
, many
parent
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parents
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that
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loves
his
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their
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son too much. To conclude,
although
parent
gives a toy to their
children
,
hopefully
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it becomes a motivation and giving something as much to
children
is not good.
However
, either its pros or cons can be neglected, and it will depend upon the
parent
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parents
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mindsets and which view the favour.
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