Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the children of having a large number of toys?
Unquestionably, every
parents
love their Change to a singular noun
parent
children
and there is
no Change the verb form
are
parents
were not love their children
. One of them buys a
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apply
toys
. Another Fix the agreement mistake
toy
believe
is that Replace the word
belief
the
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apply
parent
should not bought
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buy
be bought
a
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toys
a toy
toys
to
their Change preposition
for
children
. This
essay will be describe
the advantages and disadvantages and will be discussed them in a sensible conclusion.
On the one hand, in childhood, buying Change the verb form
describe
toys
to
their Change preposition
for
children
are
good so that it will be a motivation for their Change the verb form
is
children
. there are advantages such
as children
become obey to their parents
and grow
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growing
children
's creativity and imagination. In this
circumstance, it is important to make children
always be happy in their childhood. For instance
, parents
gave a
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toys
a toy
toys
because they
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their
children
has
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have
mathematics
competition. Correct article usage
a mathematics
As a result
, parents
gave a reward Correct pronoun usage
their parents
his parents
her parents
for
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to
children
, it will be an encouragement in his
studies.
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their
On the other hand
, some of the drawbaacks
make it problematic. Giving Correct your spelling
drawbacks
toys
to children
can cause spoiled. Generally speaking, it is bad if parents
give a toy respectively. In other word
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words
children
will become lazy and do
not have spirit because Unnecessary verb
apply
children
think whatever will be given by parents
easyly
. Interestingly, Correct your spelling
easily
Parents
have this
trait, they really love their children
. For instance
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the parent
a parent
parent
will not allow feeling sad for their Fix the agreement mistake
parents
children
because they have felt it. As a result
, many parent
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parents
that
loves Correct pronoun usage
apply
his
son too much.
To conclude, Correct pronoun usage
their
although
parent
gives a toy to their children
, hopefully
it becomes a motivation and giving something as much to Add a comma
,hopefully
children
is not good. However
, either its pros or cons can be neglected, and it will depend upon the parent
mindsets and which view the favour.Fix the agreement mistake
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