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Some people think that nespapers are the best way to learn about current events. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the fast-paced world,
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internet
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 changes
alot
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a lot
 in human daily life.
News
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 will get in our mobiles
any where
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 in the world, where accessing the
internet
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. But, many people
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 that
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 type of
news
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 is not authentication, and it will
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 the original.
This
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argues
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 both views. On one hand, adults
are
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rely on social media more. Through
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internet
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 they will get more entertainment and
news
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 without television.
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, if people
wants
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 to know live
news
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 like cricket matches, and election results, they don't want to sit
in
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a home. They can watch wherever they are just access to
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internet
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 is enough.
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,
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news
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the news
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 is spreading through social media applications
to
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 easy access. Nowadays, there are plenty
newspaper
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of newspaper
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 companies are
shutdown
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shut down
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 due to
lack
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 of customers.
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, there is popular media like BBC, and India today, still they are telecasting their
news
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in
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through television channels only. Older people like to watch
these
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type
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 of
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, they believe that channels will telecast
geninune
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genuine
news
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.
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, despite
of
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,
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internet
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 still some
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news paper
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 companies running successfully.
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, adults feel that reading
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 is better than watching electronic devices. To conclude, there
are
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 false
news
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 available
in
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internet
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 and there is no authentication.
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