the internet transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problem that did not exit before. what are the most serious problem associated with the internet and what soluction you can suggest?.

it is certainly true that the internet makes it easier to send and
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details in a few minutes, on the other ,hand there are some activities that are harmful that have not happened before. after providing
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of the
problem
has risen so sharply in the world.
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shall suggest a number of ways to tackle the
problem
. in
beginning
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,
this
is one of the worst evils. there are many reasons which are to be blamed for it. the first main reason is
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irregular network. because these networks are providing illegal content to users
such
as blue movies, pages and news. mostly these websites visited by
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groups, after visiting these websites they don't focus on studying and start thinking about
this
content, even start searching same content on other platforms. The second significant reason is hacking.
technology
made to make life easier but few ethics are used in the wrong way. it is called hackers. they hack a
government
security
system
with the help of
technology
,
then
they start blackmailing authorities for realising some criminals from jail and ask for some amount to protect is data.
in addition
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,
it
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some masses are offering jobs to
people
,
while
these
people
ask money for to provide jobs in
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multinational
company
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companies
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like Amazon, tata and
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.
however
,
this
problem
can be looked after well by several precautionary measures, first and foremost solution is the authorities are required to apply strict rules for safety.
whereas
people
don`t have to fear about police and the
government
.
government
should put on age group verification for all networks. if age is verified which network is required for access? ,
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it's not working.
thereafter
, some other measures like the
government
need to improve a security
system
, so these
people
can`t hack the
government
system
,
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government
can track these
people
within hours. if they trying to hack a
system
. these days parents are very busy in life, and even if they need to focus on children's activities, they need to check his/her mobile regularly
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this
can
also
be implemented to reduce the several effects of the mentioned
problem
. conclusion,
To conclude
,
although
there are several legitimate concerns regarding the internet,
thus
most
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the community
are used
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internet, and they are happy with the
technology
but
due to
a few ethics who do illegal activities, folk can`t believe
technology
is Wrong, if the above mentioned taken into consideration, none septums insurmountable.
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