Some people think the spread of multinational companies and globalization produce positive outcomes for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement give reasons to your answer and include example from your own knowledge and experience

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In
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modern era, globalization is increasing day by day which brings tremendous outputs towards the citizens. As we all know, some of them are against
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modernisation,
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however
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strongly agree with the above
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. Let us briefly analyse my
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many new companies are established in different areas. Because of
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employment ratio increased and it benefits everyone.
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, TATA group has recently inaugurated their new firm in Rajkot. Due to
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this lower middle-class families
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from the local got chance to earn by constructing
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and many Middle-class,class young people got
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job
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which helps to increase employment. Stating my
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point
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technological innovation helps people to make their life easy.
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, mobile phones have so many features and of them is a person did not have to remember anything. It automatically reminds you by setting up a reminder. All and all to conclude my
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globalization and the spread of multinational companies helps in increasing the employment ratio and made people's life easier
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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