Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we are no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to purchase some kind of
things
.From my way of thinking,it is very beneficial for us.
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, advertising is beneficial side for humans,and
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aspect
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for
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budget
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and health. Some
people
think that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to purchase some type of
products
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product
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.More and more
people
to
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buy a lot of
things
through it.As an example,according to the data,these days 60 per cent
humans
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buy telephones,
foods
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,televisions,and
other kind
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of
things
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it
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. Other
people
say that advertising is common
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we
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no longer pay attention to it.Advertising has
negative
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aspect
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for
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individuals
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money and health.Because sometimes
thing
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things
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show very expensive by advertising.That's why some
people
cannot purchase a lot of
things
which
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showed advertising.
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that
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some products do not be high quality.Of
course
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it has some dangers for
humans
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health.Because
of
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many
people
want to earn lots of money
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they
advertising
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danger
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products.Take as an example,now 90 per cent advertisements be unquality.
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nowadays 70 per cent
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create a new law for as a punishment these
people
. Having weighed everything mentioned
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,I can come to
a
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conclusion that all
thing
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things
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have many
benefit
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benefits
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and negative
aspect
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aspects
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for human beings.From my point of view, advertisements have many profits for some
people
's money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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