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Mobile phones and the Internet have made it easy to stay in contact with other people. However, as a lot of time is spent using telephones and computers, there is less face-to-face contact and direct communication. Is the growing use of communications technology a positive or a negative development for society ?

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The world is growing at an advanced rate, and tech is one of the main reasons why. Nowadays anything is possible
by
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 a click of
few
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 buttons. The more time
human
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humans
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 spend on tech to improve it or expand it,
more
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 spiralled we get into it and before we know it we are dependent on it.
Technology
 can be seen as both positive and negative as it is
such
 a big topic to discuss.
Firstly
, with the advancement of
technology
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 many of the basic human issues have been resolved and have been provided with some major
solution
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. Along with
technology
 the growing use and growth of the use of
internet
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 and the
facilites
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facilities
 along with the apps surrounding it has made a major difference.
Furthermore
, when individuals spend less time in vigorous activities like travelling every day for work or missing out on opportunities,
internet
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 and cell phones can be seen as a big gift.
On the other hand
,
technology
 might be too distracting if not used in a controlled manner.
For instance
,
this
 problem is more prominently seen in teenagers and younger children.
Hence
, they lack the understanding of self-control they tend to spend most of their time online, watching videos or staying on socials.
This
 might be the reason that they grow to be anti-social and less active later in life. In conclusion,
technology
 can be seen both as a gift and a curse as being
such
 a big advancement. I believe that if the use of
technology
 is actively monitored and controlled it can lead to big growth in mindset and economy.
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