In some countries, there are not enough medical or educational facilities in rural ares. Therefore, some people believe newly graduated teachers and doctors should be sent to work in rural area for sometime. Other people think that people should be free to choose where they work after graduation. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
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newly graduated adults, a great deal of interest has been shown in fields like health and teaching. Correct article usage
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equally rewarding for many. I believe, children are able to make such
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On the other hand
, being a nurse or a doctor is seen to be the moral thing to do. Additionally
, it comes with the experience of putting others before yourself, sometimes it is ideally expected. For example
, many children go through many years of studying through
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In conclusion, while it might seem like a nice thing to do, if the work in villages is not from a volunteer point of view, it should be left as a choice for the candidate to make. In my opinion, Change preposition
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