Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
people
argue that people
with
highly qualified in a profession should Change preposition
apply
work
in the nation where they were trained, while others believe that they can be
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work
work
wherever they want. Although
requiring them can increase the number of experts in a country
, their right to get better job opportunity
and improve their career belongs to them.
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opportunities
To begin
with, the number of professions such
as doctors and engineers are
imperative for the developing Correct subject-verb agreement
is
country
. Therefore
, students who have finished their study
in Fix the agreement mistake
studies
the
specific field are required to apply their knowledge and Correct article usage
a
work
to their country
. Their contribution is needed to help their country
to boost the
development and they are Correct article usage
apply
also
expected to be an expert which can educate future
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the future
generation
. Fix the agreement mistake
generations
Therefore
, some government scholarships oblige their awardees to work
at
their Change preposition
in
country
.
In contrast
, if some one
Correct your spelling
someone
stuck
in Add a missing verb
is stuck
their
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
country
where they studied, it may limit their opportunity to enhance their experience and career development. Working to
Change preposition
in
other
Correct quantifier usage
another
country
is considered not only provide
better salaries but Fix the infinitive
to provide
also
offer
better professional experiences. Fix the infinitive
to offer
For instance
, new medical graduates pursue chances to work
in Korea in order to gain advance
medical knowledge Replace the word
advanced
especially
in plastic surgery.
In conclusion, while asking skilled Add the comma(s)
,especially
people
to work
in the country
where they were trained can bring benefits for countries development and maintain talented human source, I believe that it is better to allow people
to work
in other countries because they can fulfill
their desire to study and get Change the spelling
fulfil
Add an article
a better
better prospected
career with high salary.Add a hyphen
better-prospected
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