Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
argue that
people
with
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highly qualified in a profession should
work
in the nation where they were trained, while others believe that they can
be
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work
wherever they want.
Although
requiring them can increase the number of experts in a
country
, their right to get better job
opportunity
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and improve their career belongs to them.
To begin
with, the number of professions
such
as doctors and engineers
are
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imperative for the developing
country
.
Therefore
, students who have finished their
study
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in
the
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specific field are required to apply their knowledge and
work
to their
country
. Their contribution is needed to help their
country
to boost
the
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development and they are
also
expected to be an expert which can educate
future
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generation
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.
Therefore
, some government scholarships oblige their awardees to
work
at
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their
country
.
In contrast
, if
some one
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stuck
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in
their
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the
country
where they studied, it may limit their opportunity to enhance their experience and career development. Working
to
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other
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country
is considered not only
provide
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better salaries but
also
offer
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better professional experiences.
For instance
, new medical graduates pursue chances to
work
in Korea in order to gain
advance
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medical knowledge
especially
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in plastic surgery. In conclusion, while asking skilled
people
to
work
in the
country
where they were trained can bring benefits for countries development and maintain talented human source, I believe that it is better to allow
people
to
work
in other countries because they can
fulfill
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their desire to study and get
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a better
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better prospected
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career with high salary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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