Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.(comics,books,radio,TV,film theatre) give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience

They say: “ there is no definition of success or failure, it’s just about if you’re satisfied with the result or not.” I think
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for me. I’m not
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enough to know what real failure is, but I know that I have to keep trying my best
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because success has no limit. So I think I may as well
summary
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my studying results
in
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the
year
of
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2022. 2022 is the
year
I graduated
elementary
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school
and
walking
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into a new chapter of my life
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secondary
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school
. My elementary
school
profile is filled with
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, but what makes me happier is the comment that teachers say about my active and responsible class president “career” as I value not only studying results but
also
experiences. At the beginning of the
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I got a B1 Toefl certificate and I got the IELTS certificate
last
November. I was really satisfied with my progress throughout the
year
. I
also
learn Chinese and now I can understand basic conversations (
although
the alphabet…). As I got
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secondary
school
,
last
term my profile is still great, and I get to be an English class president. I
also
discovered some of my talents like dancing, which I thought I was bad at in the past, after taking dance lessons. I actually hated dancing at that time, but now I changed my mind about it as it is a way for me to boost my energy and express myself in my own way when meeting new people. In 2023, I have
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goals to speak Chinese fluently, be more active, create my own opportunities, and keep up the good work in my studies. I hope you guys achieve good things in
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2022, and have
efficent
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efficient
plans in 2023. HAPPY NEW
YEAR
!
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