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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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environmental issue is a big threat to the entire globe. Many
people
 prefer to
use
 renewable
energy
 to protect the environment.
However
, some folks believe a serious threat to
energy
 security.
Therefore
, refuse to
use
 green
energy
 in many places. In
this
 monograph, I will discuss more details and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriad reasons to agree with the meritorious sides.
First
 of all, an excessive amount of toxic gases from industrial companies and households by using non-renewable
energy
such
 as fossil fuel indirectly affects not only the environment but
also
 harms human health. Another positive outlook in
this
 regard is that we can save monthly expenses. Recent studies conducted by scientists found that using green
energy
,
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 reduces 3% of death rates. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
By contrast
, the thrones of the area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is green energies rely on natural resources
such
 as wind, solar and water
energy
.
Therefore
, during heavy weather conditions, many
people
 might face a lack of sufficient
energy
. Another observation in
this
 regard is that insulation and maintenance charges are expensive, especially for
people
 from low incomes.
Hence
, it's apparent why many
people
 are against
this
 trend. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting that the
use
 of renewable
energy
 is of great benefit to society.
However
, the negative influence cannot be ignored,
therefore
 during extreme weather,
people
 can
use
 non-renewable
energy
.
In addition
, the government
also
 encourages
people
 to
use
 greenhouse
energy
 by providing free cost for insulation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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