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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

#people #information #research #business #world
It is not true that sharing
information
 as possible in scientific research,
business
, and the academic world is good for the public. The
information
 who possesses has the power to access it either in terroristic aspects or in saving lives. I think that
information
 that could save lives through public health care
such
 as COVID-19 vaccination should be shared freely.
Otherwise
,
information
 which causes to threaten naive people should be kept confidential. Past few years, innovation in many fields has risen steadily with building cutting-edge technology. I always believe that innovation aimed to save lives unless the know-how was shared.
Also
, in
business
,
first
 come, the
first
 will be served with a high earning profit in
this
 competitive market. In order to succeed in
business
, gaining
information
 is one fundamental skill to prosper.
In contrast
, some
information
 that might cause to harm people must be secured. Everything works like two sides of a coin; heads and tails. Most people use the
information
 for good purposes by accessing the result of scientific research.
However
, there is a certain possibility that the result can be accessed by the wrong person to harm others.
Also
, there is a chance of smuggling in
business
. In my conclusion, some
information
 in scientific research,
business
, and the academic world must be secured without sharing it with the public in order to provide for public security.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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