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Some people believe cycle have a lot of advantage. whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantage. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, communities are considering using bicycles in their everyday routine. And there are some debates that using a bicycle can benefit you. While some people say you cannot get any benefit. In
this
 essay, I will discuss that bicycles can bring advantages like exercise and saving money. But
on the other hand
, the disadvantage like prone to accidents. Some population prefer to use bicycles in their daily lives because they can benefit from them.
For example
, those who work at the office ,especially men. They use it as part of their cardio exercise, which is good for their health. And at the same time, they can save money. Because they do not have to pay for the monthly car bills, car maintenance and especially gas.
On the other hand
, the community contradict these benefits to use a bicycle. Because for them, they might able to save money and do their exercise but at the same time it is really dangerous.
For instance
, those who are going home at night. Even though they really care but not all drivers are responsible to follow road rules. And with these, they are accident-prone and have the possibility of losing their lives. In my opinion, having a car is really expensive but safety comes
first
. And regarding exercising, you can do it at your own home and free from a possible accident.
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