The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

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marriage
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society, but others think that it seems to be a
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natural
trend and right for
people
to have
this
type of
marriage
. I believe that gay
marriage
should be legal for some reasons. On one hand, in recent few years,
people
become
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to accept gay
couples
because of
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exchanges,
people
start to get more information from foreign countries that gay
couples
are allowed to get married and
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children to build their
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. Hundreds and
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thousands
of years ago,
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gaders'
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graders
couples
were recognised as
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patients;
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studies and experts were doing many
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and
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research
for proving
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that it is not a disease.
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, most
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people
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believe that it is
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the wrong
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decision to let
same
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gender get married. Especially for some
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religions
, it is important to keep to natural rules which a
marriage
should be a man with a woman.
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, I believe it is a big step for
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being
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to accept gay
couples
. It has already shocked
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people
when they figure out their sex, and it is
also
difficult to find someone to be with. Even though
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couple has been together, they have to deal with the whole
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society
. It is
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situaition
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situation
. In conclusion, I believe it is a society developed for allowing gay
marriage
because it helps
people
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cherish
their happiness and it makes the society becomes
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because everyone has their
auroity
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adroitly
to get
marriage
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