Many cities have serious problem of traffic congestion. What are the causes of this and what are some possible solutions

Growing up in population and
cities
development are the main reason
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in the number of cars have several problems in
the
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urban lives.
One
of the most important ones is that
cities
' navigation systems have gotten crowded. In
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I will write my logical opinion about how can we solve it. Nobody would dispute the fact that overcrowding in traffic has a negative impact on
people
's life.
One
of the
first
problems of the cars numbers growing and the crowdedness on the streets of
cities
is that
people
who have a car would stick for a long time on the streets and
this
situation not only can cause
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wasting the time of
people
but
also
brings with itself lots of mental and physical health issues,
for instance
,
people
who had
sticked
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in streets for long hours may have an aggressive reaction to others. Another problem that needs to be considered is air pollution because of the massive amount of CO2 gases which are produced by cars,
this
can be effective on
people
's physical health and can be the cause of lung cancer. A possible
solution
to
this
problem would be that the subway systems developed by the government. Subways are
one
of the best ways to get overcrowding control in navigation ,
however
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this
method would not respond for small
cities
,but it can be a useful idea for huge
cities
.
One
immediate practical
solution
is to build new streetways and expand the old ones,
furthermore
creating new bridges and
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ground
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tunnel
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can be helpful. To conclude, I hold the view that
first
, solving
this
bad situation needs experts who study
on
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urban life's problems and
then
presented their
solution
and
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after processing
in
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their
solution
with other sophisticated
people
the government should start to solve
this
fundamental problem.
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