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When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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Moving to a new
school
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 can be a nightmare for
students
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 because they have to adapt to the new
school
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 routine and different
environment
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. They
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 have to try making
friend
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friends
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 with other
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 who already know each other or even joined
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peer groups.
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,
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the school
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school
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 can help to overcome
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 problem and make the new
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 feel safe through help to introduce them and engage them in a workgroup.
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 of all,
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teacher
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the teacher
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 plays a great role in introducing new
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 in front of the class.
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, the new
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 do not have to introduce themselves to their classmates one by one.
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Teacher
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 can
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 make a fun and creative way during the introduction,
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like
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letting other
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to
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ask one or two things about themselves.
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, the new
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 will feel safe since their
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 interaction is facilitated by the
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.
Second
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the school
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school
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schools
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 can help new
students
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 with
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 them
into
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groupwork
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group work
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 and have the member regularly
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 every week. That way,
students
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 can get the chance to socialise with
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each of their classmates within enough time period in terms of
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 assignments. The
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 can
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 offer the new student
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 participate in extracurricular activities. Working in a group will be more effective to help the members befriend rather than just merely being in the same class for years. To sum up, all the new
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 need is to feel safe from awkward situations and accepted by the preexisted student society. Once the teachers understand
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, the new
students
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' adaptation process will not be a scary experience anymore.
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