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Some people say that buying things which are imported other countries is better than buying local products. Discuss the both sides and give your opinion.

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 topic has been discussed among
people
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 for a long time. Members of a nation think buying
an imported
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imported products
an imported product
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products
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 is good or purchasing local
products
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 is better. In my opinion, I like to buy local consumption, because it's will have a good effect on the economy of our
country
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.
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, some
people
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 think importing
products
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 is better than local
products
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. Because they believe that
products
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 made in developed countries are healthier. Developed countries have a lot of factories. They always
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 with each other. So, they try to produce
a good
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a good product
good products
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products
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 and they export
products
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 it's good for the economy of their
country
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.
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, In my ,
country
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people
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 like to buy American
products
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 because it's cheaper than my
country
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-produced
products
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.
Secondly
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, some person believes that local
products
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 are better than imports. Because, if we buy imported
products
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 they are transported for a long time to come to our
country
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. It's believed that the quality requirements of the product are lost. In the other words, long time transported
products
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 the storage period has expired. it's bad for individuals maybe they get sick. In the summary, some
people
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 like imported consumption but others like to buy local
products
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. In my view we have to buy
a local
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local products
a local product
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products
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 it's good for our health and always eat new
products
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 and good for our
country
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's economy and more industries will increase jobs and income will increase.
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