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Many people continue to use cars and motorcycle even though they know that they are based for environment. Why is this? What can be done to reduce the use of these vehicles.

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Nowadays ,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 tend to use their personal
vehicals
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vehicles
such
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 as cars and motorcycles,
although
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 they know the possible harm that can be resulted to
environment
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the environment
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. There are several reasons for
this
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 and in
following
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the following
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 paragraphs I will discuss
causes
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the causes
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 and possible solutions to overcome the excessive usage of private
vehicles
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.
Firstly
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 ,in developing countries like Sri Lanka and India ,public
transportation
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 facilities are not developed properly. Most of the time they are not scheduled to arrive on time .
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of
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that
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 public
don't
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 prefer to use those
vehicles
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 as time is
more
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a more
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 precious factor in life.
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Consequently
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,Consequently
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 usage of personal
vehicles
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 has been rising throughout the past decades.To reduce
this
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 local authorities should
established
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 punctual public
transportation
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service
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services
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,
such
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 as trains and buses .
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, due to inadequate common
transportation
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 methods in countries,
people
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 persuade to buy their own
vehical
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vehicles
.
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 ,office workers in Sri Lanka want to go
Colombo
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to Colombo
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 during weekdays as most
of
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government
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the government
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 and private sector institutions are located in there.For
them
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,them
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 there are
no
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not
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 enough
vehicals
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vehicles
.
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 most
of
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people
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the people
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 purchase cars or motorcycles to overcome
this
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 issue. To tackle
above
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the above
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 issue government should increase taxes
of
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on
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 personal
vehicles
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 meanwhile
the
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apply
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supplement
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supplementing
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 of adequate amount of public
transportation
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 facilities. In conclusion,
although
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people
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aware
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are aware
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 that personal
vehicles
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 are not good for
environment
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the environment
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 they use them for their convenience. To solve
this
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 problem government must take
actions
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action
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 immediately by
increa
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increase
 the
numbet
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number
 of buses and trains and establishing
punctuality
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the punctuality
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 of staff who
working
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work
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at
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in
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 public
vehicles
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.

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