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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of cloths. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #cloths
Some fellow believe that the choice of
cloths
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 from a person
tell
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 a lot about their culture and character. Relating to
this
 statement, I definitely agree as
cloth
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the cloth
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 is one of the primary
aspect
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 of human appearance that
visible
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 to the public. To give my view,
firstly
, some say that
cloths
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 symbolize the beauty of our appearance
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 because it is noticeable for everyone to see.
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an
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instance, modelling is one of the
job
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 that put high pressure on what their models wear. They have to be fashionable all the time. From that,
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a citizen
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citizen
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 could assess whether they are more into classy, edgy, vintage, or cheerful based on their preferred clothing style.
Secondly
, some
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also
 appeared from
psychology
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 field about how apparel could tell about a person's personality.
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, folk who would choose averagely dark colours are likely to be masculine, and
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contrary
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,
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the fellow
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fellow
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fellows
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 who
have
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colorful
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colourful
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 garment style
are tend
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 to be feminine. To sum up, it
is
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might
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 like an over-generalization, but in reality, the way a person dress do tell a lot, either their
characteristic
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 or culture.
However
, I believe there will always be excuses for
this
 case, as we live in a world where people were born to be different.
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