Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’ world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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believes
experince
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experience
of
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apply
first
important school major. other opinion
that, recently. Change the wording
another opinion
other opinions
knowladge
and Correct your spelling
knowledge
technology
needs
many Change the verb form
need
campany
for Correct your spelling
campaigns
working
more than history.
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work
firstly
, senior hight
school and university are different system Correct your spelling
high
education
where the campus must choose one subject Change preposition
of education
such
as mathematics or Tekhnik
so it is different Correct your spelling
Technik
more
than in the school having Correct quantifier usage
apply
general
major. in Correct article usage
a general
addation
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addition
company
needs many Change to a plural noun
companies
people
where
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they
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apply
,
because they will fast understand how Remove the comma
apply
are
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our
interaction
with other Replace the word
interacting
people
. on the other hand
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have Correct your spelling
fresh graduate
fresh graduates
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an oppotunity
oppotunity
if Correct your spelling
opportunity
the
major Change the word
their
needing
a company Wrong verb form
needs
for example
technology
.
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, science is a good major right nowAdd the comma(s)
, for instance,
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and Food
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this
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a favorite
favorite
subject in Indonesia for the Change the spelling
favourite
reasion
many Correct your spelling
reason
biotechnology
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biotechnologies
important
to support Add a missing verb
is important
food
security. Furthermore
, food
technology
will make new
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a new
product
for supporting Fix the agreement mistake
products
businnes
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business
such
as make
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making
instan
coffee, it is Correct your spelling
instant
product
simple to drink without going to Correct article usage
a product
coffee
shop if Add an article
a coffee
the
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apply
people
want to drink coffee.
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every
person using Change preposition
for every
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phone, Computer and other, it makes Correct article usage
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easy
to do something like Correct pronoun usage
it easy
working
or study there are many Replace the word
work
application
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applications
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, for example,
for example
grab food
, Correct word choice
and Shoopee
Shoopee
for buying Correct your spelling
Shopee
online
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the online
an online
product
. Fix the agreement mistake
products
furthermore
, Email and Website
are using all Fix the agreement mistake
Websites
of
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apply
people
like a student or Add an article
the people
company
, because it is Fix the agreement mistake
companies
more
easier than Change the word
apply
offline
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an offline
the offline
letter
.
in conclusion, science and Fix the agreement mistake
letters
technology
are more favorite
right now than experience, because globalization era a lot of Change the spelling
favourite
people
use that for working
or education Replace the word
work
such
as make
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making
aplication
and Correct your spelling
application
website
to support daily activities Fix the agreement mistake
websites
such
as businness
and Correct your spelling
business
other
.Correct pronoun usage
others
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