In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, in
majority
of nations, Add an article
the majority
a majority
people
live more than they used to be
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apply
This
essay will examine both advantages and disadvantages
of increasing life
expectancy
and provide a logical conclusion.
The two main advantages of increasing life
expectancy
are long life
for people
and more time
to spend with their family
. Fix the agreement mistake
families
Firstly
, majority
of humans in Correct article usage
the majority
this
world
want to live a long life
and do not want to die young. Life
is beautiful and they would like to enjoy every beauties
of their Change to a singular noun
beauty
life
. For instance
, they want to travel around the world
, enjoy their retirement
in good living conditions and etc. Secondly
, people
always would like to spend more time
as they can with their family. When people
are retired, they have more leisure time
to spend with their family members. For example
, they can spend some time
with their old friends and grandchildren.
But increasing life
expectancy
also
has major disadvantages
such
as increasing world
population
and altering minimum
Correct article usage
the minimum
retirement
age. In these
days, Change preposition
These
life
expectancy
and the population
of the world
are increasing with
the same pattern and Change preposition
in
this
can cause serious problems. For example
, in the future, as the
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apply
population
growth continues, more resources will be needed to fullfill
the expectations of individuals. As Correct your spelling
fulfil
full fill
people
exploit the natural and food resources in this
world
, it will be more challenging to feed and provide the people
with what they want in the future. Moreover
, retirement
age can Correct article usage
the retirement
also
increase so people
may even work at
their Change preposition
in
70's
. Change noun form
70s
This
will make young people
to
find a job more difficult than ever. In my opinion, Change the verb form
apply
increase
Add an article
an increase
of
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in
life
expectancy
has more advantages than disadvantages
.
In conclusion, although
growing life
expectancy
has some major disadvantages
such
as increasing population
and retirement
ages, it also
has benefits like long
Add an article
a long
life
for people
and more leasure
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leisure
time
to spend. I think that,
everybody should live more and experience Remove the comma
apply
this
wonderful life
as much as they can.Submitted by turalabdulsamad on
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