3. Some people think that having a set retiremnt age (e.g 65 years) for everyone, regardless off occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retiremnent? –
It is a thorny issue in today's society if the
retirement
age
should be the same for all workers or if it should differ depending on the type of each profession. I agree with the latter and I think that especially people doing hard and unhealthy jobs
will benefit more.
Many people disagree on having a set retirement
age
of around 65 years old for all work types. For instance
, it is not fair a phycologist that throughout his job life was sitting in his office and examining patients to retire at the same age
as a constructor who needs to be young, healthy, and strong to do efficient his job. To illustrate this
, humans can't do certain types of jobs
for a very long period, so retirement
for those that had a position at an unhealthy or hard work should be earlier from
everyone else. If Change preposition
than
this
won't happen, many people will suffer and far-reaching implications will follow them till the end of their life.
I reckon that there are some types of jobs
that require putting huge effort and your life in danger. To underpin the previous argument, the following example can be provided. There are not a few times that building constructors are risking their lives to build the beautiful buildings we are living or working in. Some of them are dying while some others end up with a finger less
. Correct your spelling
fingerless
In addition
, in the same context, there are those that at doing a job that causes many health problems such
as nurses and mineworkers.
Taking everything into consideration, the retirement
age
and the receive of their pension should be different according to the work type. In my view, this
statement is correct as there are many dangerous and unhealthy jobs
that require it.Submitted by tsouptsis on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite